Thursday, 8 January 2015

Unit 11 Documentary scripts. First draft, Seconds Draft and Shooting script With feedback

This is the first draft script i did. I gave it to a peer to annotate and give feedback on.






FEEDBACK

The descriptions of weather were though to be good and in setting with the scene but the description o location needs to be more detailed to show what kind of effect I am hoping to achieve
Also practical questions such s local residence being willing to be filmed was also raised as an issue which  i hadn't considered before
It also needs clearer interviewee and interviewer divides because it isn't clear
some of the scene numbers are in wrong order
He found the questions asked were informative and had good potential for an interesting answer
Some shots were not detailed as mid shot/long shot.close up etc
It also wasn't clear wether the questions are audible or not.



Second draft script with feedback



FEEDBACK

Not enough detail when discribing the scenes.
Not clearly detailed whether it is shot during day/night.
Some spelling and grammar need correcting.
Lighting and style of shooting needs more detailed descriptions

Shooting script



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