Unit 41 ROUGH CUT + Peer Feedback

The feedback I received was helpful and constructive. I think i am able to improve certain points that will make a big difference in my documentary.
Some of the main points i need to address involve the audio. The first 2 clips especially are difficult to hear and have too much ambient noise in the background. As well as this it was mentioned that i need to use some appropriate music that matches the tone of the piece and also doesn't over power the speech and content of the  video. Suggested style of music was a hip hop instrumental because hip hop is fitting with the genre of the documentary and is a big part of the subjects lives. A track with too many vocals because that will make the documentary too confusing to listen to.
Some of the shots were seen as too long and i need to include more cut aways and shorter interview shots to keep the viewers attention. Transitions are also something i have been suggested to look at. Some transitions between shots have too obvious audio changes and some shots filmed later in the day were lighted differently. This needs to be changed in after effects to have good continuity throughout. Some of the audio is obviously missing but this is a minor technical issue that can be fixed.
Apart from this I also had some good feedback. The order of clips which introduces the subjects were structured well as to introduce themselves and their relationship. Also the editing created some kind of tension which reflected the events they are talking about.

I am going to continue editing with these comments in mind and I will now consider new clips that i can include to make the documentary quicker cut to reflect what the documentary is about. I must also do some after effects editing to fix some audio problems and lighting needs to be adressed. Some shots cut out to quick or with a too slow transition in between. To fix these I will look at my existing clips and draw up a plan which shows me the order I need to arrange the clips to express the story I'm telling.